Bronze Vase

Miz Quickly's Learning Experience: Prompt HERE 

Choose one of your poems. A good one. One you REALLY like. (relax, you’re not going to harm it.)

Find it’s strongest image. (If there’s none, go on to another poem OR write a prose explanation of the image behind your poem, and use that.)  
      Forget the context.
      Stay focused on the image, and present it to us three times.
      One, at least, should be distilled. Like a haiku. (as a haiku, if you wish)
      One should find a new point of view.

 

Distilled:

This bronze bud vase -

heavy, ornate, solemn-
unlike you…

In this bud vase
pretentious flowers
crowd…

This bronze vase
scoffs.

The original:

       Forget-Me-Nots

Look, I’ve brought flowers.
I’ll put them right here.
Please, excuse the tears,
this is hard for me.

I’ll put them right here

in this bronze bud vase
near “Beloved Father”

Please, excuse the tears.

My eyes don’t know how
to ignore my heart.

This is hard for me.

Is it for you, too?
Are you even here?